Sunday 13 January 2013

Marking Feedback Sheets - Resource

Thanks to Jenn's  brilliant blog http://littlemisslud.wordpress.com/ I have dusted these marking feedback sheets off and included the full resources for people to use. Below is the text from the help sheets I give to students. I mark their work and then stick one of these in books and they simply rewrite a paragraph.  There are sheets for reading and writing. I haven't stuck to the APP levels as I wanted to use these for KS3 and KS4. 

Check out http://learningfrommymistakesenglish.blogspot.co.uk/2012/11/much-ado-about-marking-and-progress.html  for more details of how I use them.




Improving Writing: Sentences                                       Name:

 

To get higher marks, you need to:

·         Vary how you start your sentences

·         Vary the length of your sentences

·         Use a variety of sentence structures

 


Rewrite a paragraph in your writing and try to improve the sentences.

 

·         Make sure they all start with a different word.

·         Use a question or command in your sentences.

·         Make one of your sentences short (1-4 words long).

·         Try to start some of your sentences with a verb (running), an adverb (slowly), an abstract noun (fear) or a preposition (under).

·         Or try to use some of these sentence structures:

_____________ , ____________, _____________________.

___________, ______________________________.

_________? ________________________________.

 
 

 


Improving Writing: Punctuation                            Name:

 

To get higher marks, you need to:

·         Use all punctuation marks correctly.

·         Use a variety of punctuation at least once ( - : ; ,. ?...! “) 

·         Use some complicated punctuation accurately (:;-)

 

 


Rewrite a paragraph in your writing and try to improve the punctuation.

 

·         Read the paragraph again and check that no full stops are missing.

·         Check that commas have been use correctly. Would it make sense as a sentence on its own? Sometimes we put two sentences together with a comma, when a full stop is just as good.

·         Add a bracket, question mark or exclamation mark to your writing. You don’t need all of them. 

·         Find two sentences that are closely linked together and join them together with a semicolon, instead of a full stop.

·         A colon (:) introduces a new item.  For example- It was a day I always hated: Monday. Try to use one colon in your writing.

 

 


Improving Writing: Paragraphs                            Name:

 

To get higher marks, you need to:

·         Vary the length of your paragraphs

·         Link paragraphs together

·         Structure paragraphs effectively

·         Use paragraphs correctly

 


Rewrite two paragraphs in your writing and try to improve them.

 

·         Look at your paragraphs again and check that you have used a new paragraph for each new topic or idea. TIP TOP – a new paragraph for each new TIME, PLACE, TOPIC or PERSON.

·         Have you linked your paragraphs together? Sometime you might do it clearly – then, after that, secondly. Look at using connectives to link ideas together.

·         Does your paragraph have a clear structure? Does the opening sentence introduce the ideas in the paragraph (topic sentence)? Do the following sentences develop the ideas in greater detail?

·         Have you varied the length of your paragraphs?

·         Try to write down a one sentence paragraph – just one on its own can be very effective.

 
 

 


Improving Writing: Interesting Content                        Name:

 

To get higher marks, you need to:

·         Avoid clichés or the most obvious things

·         Think of an original and interesting way to perspective

·         Show off your knowledge of other subjects and ideas

·         Show off your vocabulary

 

 


Rewrite a paragraph in your writing and try to make it interesting.

 

·         Are your ideas original? Do you think someone else in the room will have written something similar? What could you do to make your stand out and seem different?  

·         Get rid of clichés. Talk about things nobody else will. Everybody moans about school dinners in school, so talk about the library instead.

·          Use an interesting perspective. Show it from someone else’s, or an object’s. You could even tell it with a particular slant or genre – science fiction, horror or adventure.

·         Think about hooking people in to your writing with the opening sentence.

·         Put in a fact or an interesting piece of information that very few people know.

·         Think about adding some interesting adjectives (dull, monotonous, decrepit) or adverbs (solemnly, earnestly, begrudgingly) to lift your writing up.

·         Use some figurative language in your paragraph (alliteration, simile, metaphor, personification, hyperbole). Remember do not over use it or it will not be as effective as it could be.

 

  


Improving Writing: Presentation                          Name:

 

To get higher marks, you need to:

·         Make your handwriting neat and readable

·         Make your work look like the text you are writing

·         Make it look interesting for a reader

 

 


Copy out a section of your writing and make it more presentable.

 

·         Slow down when you write so that you don’t make too many mistakes and you can form your letters clearly.

·         Try not to join letters together in your words. This might make your writing easier to read.

·         Does your text look like the text you are supposed to be writing? Do you need columns? Pictures? Headings? Sub-headings?

·         Could you make it look more interesting on the page for a reader?




Improving Writing: Use PEE                                          Name:

 

To get higher marks, you need to:

·         Start all paragraphs with a topic sentence

·         Use a quote to support your ideas

·         Explain how your quote supports your point

 

 


Rewrite a paragraph in your writing and try to improve the use of PEE.

 

Tips:

·         Start your paragraph with the phrase – ‘The writer uses…’

·         Find a quotation to support your idea

·         Make sure your quote follows the topic sentence.

·         Use the following phrase to introduce your quote – ‘An example of this when … says…’

·         Use quote around the speech

·         Make sure you have 3 to 5 sentences explaining your point.

 

 
 


Improving Writing: Evidence                                      Name:

 

To get higher marks, you need to:

·         Use words from the book

·         Link your quotes to what you have said

·         Use lots of short and appropriate quotes

 

 


Rewrite a paragraph in your writing and try to improve the evidence.

 

·         Always use speech marks (“”) to show you have used a quote.

·         Try to use one words quotes too – they are “very clever” if you can link them in to your sentence.

·         Use a sentence like one of the following to introduce your quote:

§  An example of this is when ----- says …

§  We see this when …

§  ----- says…

§  The writer uses words like “ ….” and “…”

·         If you have difficulty finding a quote, think of a line and write it in your own words.

·         Make sure your quote isn’t floating on its own. It must be part of a sentence.

 
 


Improving Writing: Explanations                          Name:

 

To get higher marks, you need to:

·         Write detailed explanations

·         Give clear reasons as to why the writer has used things

·         Link to other aspect in the play, novel or poem

 


Rewrite one paragraph in your writing and try to improve it.

 

·         Make sure you use one of the following words in your explanations – because, so , as

·         Give a reason – why did the writer include this quote?

·         Think about the effect on the reader / audience

·         Talk about the quote. How does it prove your point?

·         Aim to write about 3 to 4 sentences proving your idea.

·         Link your quote to other aspects of the novel. Think about language, themes, context and structure.

·         Don’t repeat your topic sentence. Add something new.

·         Remember to conclude your point somehow.

 

 


Improving Writing: Deeper Meaning                    Name:

 

To get higher marks, you need to:

·         Read between the lines

·         Talk about things that are not obvious without knowing the story very well  

·         Think of an original and intelligent point

·         Show off your knowledge of areas to do with the book

·         Make links with other things

 


Rewrite a paragraph in your writing and try to make it show your ability to look at the deeper meaning.

·         Look at the language or techniques used in the quote. Can you use them to support your ideas?

·         Don’t talk about the story.

·         Link your ideas to how the reader or audience should feel. What about the reader’s opinion if this is a tragedy or not?

·         Show the Examiner that you know the story well by referring to the history of the story, themes or some other part of the story.

·         Make a connection between the points you have here with a different point in the book.

·         Look for SYMBOLS

·         Explain how your point links in with the message of the play/novel/poem.

·         Give reasons to your ideas. The following sentence will help you – ‘The writer uses … to …’

·         Use the deeper meaning explanation words – implies, symbolises, suggest, highlights, shows, demonstrates

 

 


Improving Writing: Presentation                          Name:

 

To get higher marks, you need to:

·         Make your handwriting neat and readable

·         Make your work look like the text you are writing

·         Make it look interesting for a reader

 

 


Copy out a section of your writing and make it more presentable.

 

·         Slow down when you write so that you don’t make too many mistakes and you can form your letters clearly.

·         Try not to join letters together in your words. This might make your writing easier to read.

·         Does your text look like the text you are supposed to be writing? Do you need columns? Pictures? Headings? Sub-headings?

·         Could you make it look more interesting on the page for a reader?



 

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