Sunday 30 June 2024

I am ready for my closeup now, Mrs Writer (Part 2) - the special edition

I wrote on using film clips to explore structure and the structure question on the exam paper last year. Here is the link to the blog: 


https://learningfrommymistakesenglish.blogspot.com/2023/03/i-am-ready-for-my-closeup-now-mrs-writer.html


Students have a lot of background knowledge around film and storytelling, which we don’t employ enough in lessons. The sad demise of media elements of the English curriculum means that it feels naughty and decadent to do something that isn’t linked to the demigods of Literature. I like digressing every so often and showing a clip. Here are some that have a specific focus on structure. 


I tend to show the clip to students first. Then, I show them a range of the camera shots. I pick one and ask students to say why the director chose that moment to focus on that shot then. What does it symbolise? How does it link to other shots? 



The Others 


I love ‘The Others’ and I find this scene great for talking about ‘tense’ and ‘suspense’. Largely, students don’t know the difference between the two and it is quite important with stories. The relationship between what is inevitable and what is a surprise underpins stories. Ghost stories play with these two all the time. 


I tend to focus on the third camera shot. Nicole Kidman has her back to camera. The symbolism isn’t lost on the students. Something can see her, but she can’t see it. The thing is shadowing her. In the scene, there’s a lot of things at the edge of shots or just out of the frame. She’s close but just not close enough. 


Usually students obsess over questions in creepy stories like this. The reader is asking… The reader wants the question answered …  This story and others like it are about proof and reasoning. Take the Rosie exam paper. It features a woman spotting a strange child in her garden.  She has proof of something strange and she tries to rationalise it. Then, something happens to contradict that rationalising of things. The same happens in ‘The Others’.  



Ripley: 


https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=BIcvJFre0SU


I loved ‘Ripley’ and could easily pick any episode and any scene, but this one I like because of the use of camera shots to frame the character’s thought processes. His back to Marge is an interesting choice. Most people would look head on during a conversation. He continues with his back to her. Plus, the use of objects is quite telling. He shifts from making drinks to cleaning a very heavy ashtray. I find this scene interesting because of the use of objects and body language. We are seeing the thought processes in Ripley’s head without hearing a word from him directly. I get students to focus on the last camera shot above and discuss how the director conveys the character’s inner conflict. 


Sabotage: 

  


https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=178s548EjM4​


Hitchcock, as I’ve said before, is a dream for exploring structure. ‘Sabotage’ is an example of playing with expectations and dramatic irony. A boy carries a bomb on a bus. We know it is a bomb, but the boy doesn’t. Modern sensibilities tell us that a boy will not be blown up in the story. And, especially, a boy playing with a puppy! This whole scene is playing with the idea. We are expecting him to escape, yet Hitchock doesn’t allow that to happen. It is a great clip for talking about expectations and writers playing with what we expect to happen. 


I also like this scene for the use of time imagery. Recently, we’ve seen a lot of extracts that deal with time. There’s a sense of urgency created not only by the bomb, but also the use of clocks. In fact, the director zooms in on the handle. That emphasis on time is increased as the scene goes on. Writers tend to be more subtle than Hitchcock when conveying time, but this makes a good starting point. 


Wonder: 

 


https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=29VjYkPPY2s


This clip for me is interesting because it revolves around character discoveries. Jack stands up to peer pressure and bullies. He discovers the implications of his actions - the fight. That second to last shot is heartbreaking. He realises what impact it will have. That is also framed in Auggie’s slow discovery of Jack’s support of him. 


Lots of students see extracts as being tense yet they often forget the emotional journey of characters. All too often, the extracts in the exam are extracts around a moment of discovery or change. A character learns something that will change their perspective on things. The character at the beginning is different to the one at the end. Students need to see that. 


We don’t look at moments of discovery enough in stories. They often are the key drivers of narrative. If we look at all the past exam papers, they are character centric. They all, and I mean all, feature a character discovering something.  



 The Perfect Storm:


The Perfect Storm is a great example of using light imagery to signify meaning. I like to look at this scene and discuss weather and light in terms of symbolism. The opening shows the hope the men have. They think they have escaped from the worst storm ever. 


I also like talking about this scene in terms of ‘false sense of security’. Both the characters and the audience are lulled into thinking things are safe. That tricking the audience is interesting.  I don’t see enough students talking about the tricky of writers. The writer focuses on X so we don’t realise Y. In fact, we have this rigid view of writers presented to us. Writers are tricky things and they do mislead us and lie to us. Students need to explore when they are being manipulated and fooled in writing. 


Hidden Figures: 


https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=aypIHx2iGQs


This scene is great for exploring how things convey meaning through the presentation of things. The middle shot is great for this. I simply ask: What do you notice about this shot? 

All the men are wearing the same colour. The woman is the only black woman in the shot. The woman is the only person wearing something different. She is positioned in the middle of things. The camera shot is looking down on her. Each one of those things holds a symbolic meaning. Not only is Taraji P. Henson’s acting is phenomenal, but the framing of the scene echoes the ideas being challenged. 


I like this scene because it shows how subtle choices have a greater level of significance. For example, Kevin Costner’s moving down a flight of steps indicates so much more in the context. As too does his destroying the bathroom sign. 



Thanks for reading, 


Xris 


Sunday 16 June 2024

The problem with words and vocabulary

Vocabulary is great at times, but we are in danger of infantilising students, if all we do is teach words. 


For teachers of A-Level English Language we are familiar with how children acquire language. After babbling, children start the ‘one-word stage’ at about a year old. Children learn words and use them for a range of functions. Take the word ‘ball’. In the one-word stage, it can mean a number of things. I want the ball. Where is my ball? This is my ball. The word has multiple meanings because the child has yet to articulate those meanings. As the child develops, they move through various stages. The ‘two-word stage’ where children connect words together - ‘ball park’. Then, ‘telegraphic stage’ where children produce three or four word utterances - ‘give ball me’. 


The problem around vocabulary in secondary school is that we often teach it like students are in the ‘one-word stage’. We use the word to point at things. ‘Indigenous’! We might offer them a sentence which models it, but we don’t help to tether it. Words don’t sit on their own. They connect to other words. The gang up with others. They work as a team with several others. They are connected. 


Yes, we teach words, but at the same time, teach them connected words tethered to others. Here’s some examples for poetry. 



Charge of the Light Brigade

Exposure

bombastic

emotive 

epic

fast-moving

glorifying

immortalising

jingoistic

lyrical

passionate

patriotic

rhythmic

romanticised

rousing

stirring

visual

atmospheric

bleak

melancholic

nightmarish

painful

personal

pitiful

psychological

realistic

slow-paced

stoic

visual

imminent danger

personal cost

cannon fodder

failed advance

celebrated sacrifice

inspiring act

valiantly facing death

blind faith

badly outgunned 

 

 

bleak depiction of suffering

collective loss of faith

constant feeling of being in edge

driving force

emotional roller coaster of suffering

experienced soldiers

futility of war

harrowing experience

horrific fare

true cost

 

 



Remains

Bayonet Charge

anecdotal

colloquial

confused

disjointed

dreamlike

graphic 

haunting

informal

nightmarish

patriotic

psychological

questioning

shocking

visual

vivid

warning

challenging

confused

desensitised

determined

discovery

distancing

emotionless

futile

helplessness

isolating

patriotic

proud

questioning

reflective

repressed

stoic

thoughtful

broken soldiers with broken minds

distant memories

functioning minds

hazy memories

immaturity of soldiers

lack of understanding

mental consequences

ordinary people

sleep walking

stain on his soul

traumatic events

a great masterplan

a helpless pawn

a moment of clarity

a tool for war

awaken to reality

blind faith

challenging deceptions

dutiful soldiers

psychological conflict

thoughtless actions

unwanted memories








London

War Photographer

accurate

angry

challenging

corruption

critical

freedom

haunting

illuminating

lyrical

moralising

political

realistic

simplistic

uncovering

visual

angry

apathy

cynical

desensitised

emotionless

haunting

moralising

muted

poignant

repressed

simplistic

sombre  

stoic

visual

voyeuristic

consequences of revolution

controlling authorities

impact of capitalism

physical and psychological imprisoning

powerful ruling class

social commentary

stark inequalities and injustice

suffocating society

visible hypocrisy

blind to the truth

contrasting worlds

distraction from life

hidden suffering

insignificance of events

lasting impact

sacred to face the reality

selfish society

simplification of war

the reduction of importance

 




Ozymandias

Storm on the Island

anecdotal

arrogance

attacking

bombastic

critical

god-like

ironic

political

pride

satirical

timeless

tragic

visual

vivid

conversational

deceptive

disgusted

inclusive

political

realistic

restless

sensory

symbolic

understated

uniting

visual

 

 

corrupting influence of power

futility of mankind

hierarchical power structures

inequality between different people

ruling class

social commentary

the arrogance of mankind

unstoppable force of nature

 

destructive yet deceptive force

imminent danger

lack of protection

limited power of man

practical nature of living

suffering of humanity

underwhelming power

vast power of nature

 




Emigreé

Poppies

anecdotal

childish

fearful

hopeless

impressionistic

melancholic

oppressive

personal

questioning

sensory

visual

 

 

ambiguous

bonds 

disjointed

emotional

maternal

metaphorical

nostalgic

personal

relationship

reminiscing

romanticising

sensory

symbolic

visual

vivid

 

a picture of displacement

a question of identity

beyond control

outsider’s perspective

sense of belonging

sense of innocence

strong connection / bond

unconditional love

helpless bystander

human sacrifice

live and breathe the pain

maternal bond

outsider’s perspective

public visual display

the memory of tactile moments of care

unconditional love

young, free and innocent

 

 




My Last Duchess

Kamikaze

controlling

domineering

anecdotal

reminiscing

powerful

sinister

ominous

misogynistic

euphemistic

objectifying

dehumanising

insecurity

boasting

smothering

paranoid

 

ambiguous

bonds 

disjointed

emotional

metaphorical

nostalgic

personal

relationship

reminiscing

romanticising

sensory

symbolic

visual

vivid

 

low-class position

dark undertones

male gaze

aristocracy

possession rather than person

jealous tendencies

 

 

 

 

Internal conflict

dishonour the family

bring shame

past innocence

ostracised and rejected

silent rejection

 

 

 



Tissue

Checking Out My History

controlling

domineering

anecdotal

reminiscing

powerful

sinister

ominous

misogynistic

euphemistic

objectifying

dehumanising

insecurity

boasting

smothering

paranoid

 

ambiguous

bonds 

disjointed

emotional

metaphorical

nostalgic

personal

relationship

reminiscing

romanticising

sensory

symbolic

visual

vivid

 

low-class position

dark undertones

male gaze

aristocracy

possession rather than person

jealous tendencies

 

 

 

 

Internal conflict

dishonour the family

bring shame

past innocence

ostracised and rejected

silent rejection

 

 

 



However, words and phrases alone don’t work alone. Sometimes, we need to give wider structures. The infamous sentence starter has changed in my eyes. I don’t use them in the way I once did. Instead, I use a range of sentence structures of a theme. See the example below. 

The link for the document is here: 

https://www.dropbox.com/scl/fi/n67vzrjmio7ssq5ukc19r/Talking-about-character.docx?rlkey=f2icjp08y8p17zfvv9447pccg&st=waof2gx4&dl=0


Formulating ideas, doesn’t just mean words, phrases but also some syntactic structures. Now, the sentences above aren’t going to blow anyone’s mind, but they address the idea we are exploring about character. If we are genuinely concerned about improving oracy, then we need to look at how students structure utterances. They need structures to work with. Yes, speech is quite nebulous and free, but students need guidance on how to extend, expand and develop ideas. 


The above sheet is a tool for discussion. I can simply focus on one area or get students to pick what they want to focus on when looking at a text. The sentence is the starting point for us to explore and develop things. Students need guidance on how to connect words, phrases and ideas. Otherwise, we end up with word soup. They use some fancy words, but not in any meaningful way. Starting with a simple sentence construction allows them to add, develop, extend and connect. 


Our subject is a bit more than words, words, words. It is words, phrases and syntax! 


Thanks for reading, 


Xris